The Dance

My brother Patrick wrote this

In silent steps she slowly passed
And she floated above the floor,
I saw in her eyes the saddened past

And I knew I had seen her before.

She danced with a man I had never seen,
And he looked at my very core
And he smiled and laughed at the fact it seemed,
That he knew I had seen her before.

Her perfume was a scent that once I had known,
And it left me wishing for more,
In knowledge of mystery then I 'd grown,
And I knew I had seen her before

 

Her hair and her skin looked soft as the rain

And it told me of a time before

My heart fell to hell and lovelost pain

For I knew where I had seen her before

 

I waited a time for her to leave,
Then I followed her out the door,
I had to know so  I could believe
Now the world shall see her no more.

 

In love I shall live, in tears I'll forgive

And in time I'll accept my fate

But when love builds a heart, and is pulled apart

It becomes the most vivid hate.

 

Author's Note

My brother Patrick J Murphy wrote this poem! All rights are reserved!
Anyways this poem ( summed up) is: love, jealousy, betrayal, hate,etc.

Reviews

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Wow, this is amazing. Profound and well-written. Although the words discuss very harsh, serious themes, the writer's beautiful imagery and romantic tone softens the overall impact the poem has on the reader.

I like how the final stanza "wakes the reader up", so to speak, and finishes very suddenly with "vivid hate". Fantastic.

I really enjoyed this! Pat should definitely write more and have his own profile.

[MOON]

Very good tell your brother to write more.

[E. Ryan Miller]

Really liked this. There were what I believe to be a few errors: "I silent steps..." and "He look at me very core." Just little typos. But the poem is a really intriguing narrative. It involves the reader and compels them to continue.

[ravenjess]

this is an amazing poem! i love it!

[Coyote Poetry]

Your brother is a very good writer. The thoughts and visions create by his poem were strong and alive in this poem. I had to read a few times. Thank you for sharing your brother's poem. It was outstanding.
Coyote

[Thea]

"In love I shall live, in tears I'll forgive
And in time I'll accept my fate
But when love builds a heart, and is pulled apart
It becomes the most vivid hate."
Aw...That last stanza! So touching and beautiful!
This is so great! I love it...
Excellent!
:)))