Lost

I am lost in this world so cold,

I am lost in its clutches so cruel,

I am lost in its laughing taunts,

I am lost, I am unknown to forgiveness.

 

I was lost once in love,

I was lost once in someone's arms,

I was lost once in a crowd of cheers,

I was lost once in smiles so dear.

 

I will be lost soon in sin,

I will be lost soon, gone and burned,

I will be lost since I chose this road,

I will be lost, since I have lost you.

Author's Note

This is just a random, I wrote [ kinda ] on a dare, still hope you like it!!

Reviews

[Yellow Butterfly]

I am, I was, I will.....

Powerful in every sense of the word, I liked choice of words ..I am.etc as it followed the theme and I liked how your strength and courage came through even though the ending was sad.

Don't write for dare's...write from your heart, this is a good piece of work.

[Jack Isaac]

The past was good; the present and future look grim. Noticed the alignment here, "a crowd of cheers" became "laughing taunts" and then "I chose this road" --which is pivotal to being lost. Nicely written, but try it without "I am & I was" in the 1st & 2nd stanzas and see if that gives your poem a new perspective. :)

[WhiteWillow]

Sometimes your best works will come from random nothingness. And something beautful is born. Keep writing when you feel like writing; something will always come to you.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Repetition gave life and strength to the poem. Easy to get lost. When your heart is sad. Sadness is the place to rest till you are brave again to try love again. Thank you for a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Dove]

Wonderful wonderful wonderful poem!!! I love it.

[Revolutionary]

You should follow it with found.great poem with alot of sadness.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Dare are not! It was written well! A lot of people can relate to this! Great job!

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Again, love the repetition. It keeps the ideas tidy and adds an intensity to the pace that is very entertaining. Love that last line. It is the heart of the entire poem. Another great poem, Bridget! (:

[The Scholar]

I REALLY like the change in tenses, which I'm sure has been said previously.
This piece is so well-written, and it was a pleasure to read.
Sad, but still a pleasure.

[paparapapa]

At first, I was kind of unsure about what the poem really wants to tell, but the last line just did it for me. Haha. I liked how you used different tenses! Just a few tweaks and a little bit of polishing will make it better. Good job. ;)