Feeling Alone

She’d shown us the way,

and all we had done

was laugh in her face,

mocking the strangeness

of this magnificent place,

that she’d once called home.

And now, I feel alone.

Author's Note

In the briefest of words, I attempted to paint a scene of conflict between Mother Earth and Humankind.

Reviews

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Nice place of words, amazing write.

[micky]

The conflict left in this piece was great but I feel like its missing something....

[Emily]

I love it!
Very nice wording!

[PoeticChico]

If only...
I just love the way you wrote this short piece.
It effectively and creatively conveys your message.
a bit heartbreaking too!
thanks for sharing Brian.

[dan]

Brian, To take on such a massive concept was very ambitious. To convey your message in a write as brief as you did takes much thought and an abundance of talent. VERY well conceptualized and superbly written. If you don't mine I'm saving this in my library favorites. Great piece of writing!! take care...dan

[Miss Sharon]

(I attempted to paint a scene of conflict between Mother Earth and Humankind.) And you did so with vivid imagery Brian. I look forward to reading more of your work. And by the way....we share the same last name and just may be related! ~Sharon Peeples

[Brian M. Peeples]

Thank you for the review! And haha, that's actually pretty neat! Who knows, perhaps we are!

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and direct thoughts my friend. It is sad what we do to Mother Nature.
Coyote

[Robert Parlange]

I like the brevity; and the ambiguity. “She” could also be freedom: Lady Liberty. Once we welcomed the people of the world to our country. Now we want to build walls to keep them out. Good job. You are very talented.

[XX]

It's nice, but for me it will be 'awesome' if you make it longer. :)

[wordman]

well,with the explanation,you have said a lot with few words