In My Current State

I have slammed shut the door

to my shattered heart,

and locked myself away

within a bleak room,

full of damaged art.

I sit alone, crying.

Flooding the room

with my tears,

making certain

of my doom.

Soon to drown...

from my own sorrows.

I am deeply afraid

of what is to come,

or if I’ll ever see Tomorrow.

But, there is a way out.

A window I had not seen,

that was always there.

Though, it may be too late.

Especially in my current state.

I cracked it open,

where air began to seep in

But other things also began to creep in,

and I was no longer alone.

I was no more on my own.

Drilling their knowledge

into my damaged head,

I knew that I

would soon be dead.

I’d never be able to fly.

My mind began to drown,

with the many unwanted ideas,

and erratic thoughts,

to where I sought

my own happy ending...

I began to elevate

through the open window,

a gateway to my next journey,

to where I would finally

be free,

and no longer...

in my current state.

Author's Note

One of my longer poems; but my thoughts and how I feel, I felt needed more words to express the deep emotions I was experiencing whilst writing this. I hope you all enjoy.

Reviews

[SheIsMe]

You write similar to me, dark and emotional. But it can be so freeing, right? To release these thoughts in poetic form instead of act them out?? I feel you.

[Moonlight]

This one here has power, thought, reality and the simplicity of reflecting how a single step, one initiative can bring about a change in your current state. I loved how it flowed with so much ease. Thanks for sharing. )

[Emily]

I love this one!
Keep on writing!!

[Jane P.]

Really powerful stuff.

On the technical side - you created some great pace and rhythm here. Your use of punctuation really aids the reader, making your poem easy to read and evoking a powerful tone.

Conceptually, I love the images you create. You use beautiful language to create these melancholy images which is just amazing. Really great atmosphere and speaks its truth loud enough for anyone to hear and understand.

Awesome work. Keep it up!

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting journey in the poetry.
"I began to elevate
through the open window,
a gateway to my next journey,
to where I would finally
be free,"
The above lines would lead to a dead-end. Perfect closure for the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
Great message that being free is a must:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[zaisham9393]

Brian I think this is your best poem ....you expressed your feeling so well.
Loved it :)

[wordman]

we just got to be free,a great message,well written.

[dan]

Brian, A subtle type of story-poem that builds through some anxious and stressful emotional episodes...trapped and not wanting to be trapped...a window seems to be the pinnacle of hope, an escape, if you will. Triumph rules the day as the window widens, a source of solace, a path to better places and a state of mind more soothing. Add all this to a clever shifting rhyme scheme and you, sir, have got yourself a winner! Very nicely done. take care...dan