At Yesterday's Funeral

I ponder the words

so deeply,

and rather, softly.

Listening often,

too closely.

I ponder what yesterday

says to today.

Before the night’s end.

I wouldn’t know what to say.

At her funeral,

perhaps a farewell.

I’ll tell her...

I am doing well.

I did make

a new friend

today, though,

at yesterday’s funeral.

How sad to think,

that I was just getting

to know you.

Though, that’s life.

Sad, but true.

Even yesterday dies...

but then gives birth to,

a brand new today...

Reviews

[Emily]

I really like this one!!
Keep it up!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Death and life do flow together. I understand the story in the poem. Funerals do gather people together to mourn a loss and bring people together. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[dan]

Brian, The poem...the idea...is a good one and well written. I'm afraid to tell you, though...I was distracted by your excessive punctuation. I'm sorry to say that because I know you well enough to realize that you don't tend to make those kinds of mistakes, so I'm assuming that was meant as a technical device for the reader to decipher. And I couldn't decipher it. I'm sorry, but I think I also know you well enough to be pretty sure that you will take this as CONSTRUCTIVE criticism and not be offended. Please let me know if I am correct in that assumption. take care...dan

[Brian M. Peeples]

I do understand your constructive criticism, and I do apologize for the excessive punctuation. I did have a reason for it, though. I used punctuation for emphasis on specific words, and tried to add emotion to it, by taking a pause before a word, and such. Every pause, I imagined, a heartbeat would skip; that's how I wrote it, and I admit that it was deliberately placed that way. I do apologize, though, and removed a couple of the commas; the ones I felt weren't as necessary. Thank you for your input. I'm always appreciative of friendly feedback, whether it's to improve on my writing, or a friendly 'you did good', haha. Thanks, once again!

[dan]

Brian, Please, you have no reason to apologize. As I said, you don't normally make that type of mistake so I did figure you had used the punctuation to put a stronger spin on points you wished to arm with more power. I also use punctuation to emphasize certain power points in my pieces occasionally, and I probably have a few posted here on WC that could use a little "cleaning up." The revised version reads so much better and I do recognize specific points of emphasis delineated. I'm glad you didn't take it personally because I really believe that since we 'friended' each other your writing has evolved into stronger pieces, better writing that indicates a poet who is ready to take his work to a new level. I see that in you, and I compliment you for that. take care...dan