A Way Out

I feel a pain, a pain so deep

That brings me down,

Down to my knees

Always so very weak,

The sorrows,

They keep growing

Always in pain,

In pain as we speak

But I am still hoping, always

To find a cure

A way out

But there is nothing

Only doubt

But on my journey

To the ends of the world

I had soon come across

A young girl

So, I simply called out,

I called out to her

And said what I’d rehearsed

All my life,

Even though this pain,

It still hurt

‘Help me, would you?’

‘I think I've lost my way’

‘Pray for me, would you?’

‘I think today is the day’

Reviews

[bee]

Your stories and poems always make a connection with the reader....you have a gift Brian. The way you depicted pain and then a glimmer of hope is rather beautiful.

[Emily]

Love it!
I like your wording!
Great job!

[Preliving]

Love this, the form really captures how pain leads to more pain. I hope the young girl was able to help.

[Cambion]

Thanks for sharing your poem! It's true that poetry provides catharsis like little else. The pregnancy of the final line is intriguing, and invites the mind to imagine what sort of day today might be. It's quite mysterious. Again, thanks for the good read.

[Matching Socks]

This tugs at my heart. It's very relatable.
I hope this prayer is answered.

[Ally]

I love the way this poem is structured, it all flows together perfectly!

[Lizardo]

Amazing poem, Really nice and I like everything about it
Great pice of work

[Moonlight]

It is a beautiful poem with emotion dripping from every line. I liked it a lot! :)
Great work!! Keep Writing..!

[The Black Warrior]

OH My God, I can feel your pain this poem:



‘Help me, would you?’

‘I think I've lost my way’

‘Pray for me, would you?’

‘I think today is the day’

I'll pray for you ;)

this is well written, very emotional and descriptive... desperate...hopeful....contains a multitude of feelings

Thank you for sharing your wonderful work!

[Brian M. Peeples]

Thank you for reading my work and reviewing! I appreciate it!

[The Black Warrior]

You are very welcom! :D

[Cool Girl]

This is so pretty! I love it! Thank you for sharing. I love the emotion and everything. This is very passionate. Great job!