A Beautiful Night

There you were

And here I was

Back and forth

A timeless love

For all of forever

But sometimes lost

Within the snowy fields

Of the man, Jack Frost

Frozen and cold

Having nowhere to go

No home, no bed

No place to call my own

But then you appear

A glimmer of hope returning

As your light grows nearer

No more pain, no more fear

Burning away the melting snow

Warming my heart’s fading glow

Bringing my soul back to life

On this very beautiful night

Reviews

[Cool Girl]

I really enjoyed this! Great job!

[Ittai Bryan Matthew Nya..]

great rhymes there. It would make a good flow with a beat in the background

[Urja Gokani]

this poem was amazing i loved the last 4 lines.

Burning away the melting snow
Warming my heart’s fading glow
Bringing my soul back to life
On this very beautiful night

[ANTO]

As I read this Brian I was reminded of a story from my childhood - the story of 'The Little Matchgirl' by Hans Christian Anderson and that was a delight for me. Thank you.
The subject died for me in this and was reunited in Heaven with their one true love (the soul reborn in God) and the final line - like the closing of a favourite book, was superbly, warmly, familiar.
Thanks for sharing

[Duckey]

Very well written I like it! You have used wonderful language and the poem flows very well. Thanks for sharing, keep it up!

[Laura Lynn]

who is the person burning away the melting snow, I guess to read everything here you elucidate

[Brian M. Peeples]

Writing is sort of like magic, and a magician never reveals his secrets.

[Falling Leaf.]

I was typing a rather lengthy review and my bloody mobile erased it all! Oh, well. This piece was exquisite and spoke to me very personally, because it is a feeling that I wonder about and long for. I read and reread your second to last stanza multiple times; it was absolutely lovely. Thank you for sharing your beautiful poetry... And what it feels like to finally be warmed up.

[Brian M. Peeples]

Thanks! I appreciate it. I actually wrote this in response to my other poem, "You Are." Originally, this poem was going to be called, "I Am" and it was going to be a "twin poem," but then I began to write this one and it came out differently, so I went along with the story and called it, "A Beautiful Night." Now you know the history behind this poem, haha! Thanks for the review!

[Falling Leaf.]

Just read You Are and it is equally great! No trouble at all!

[Brian M. Peeples]

The first stanza in both are rather similar, so you can tell I was beginning to make them very much alike, but then this one strays from the other's similar path.

[Falling Leaf.]

Better that than to force it. :)

[Brian M. Peeples]

I know. I've never been one to really force my writing. When I've tried, in the past, to write a specific way, my stories and poetry turned out less than the ones I put my heart and soul into. My poems on here who have pretty much zero reviews and not much feedback or positive comments, those were ones that were most likely forced. The ones like this, that receive a lot of positive feedback, these ones I didn't have the heart to force, nor did I want to. Coming from the heart, these poems are better than the ones that were forced.

[Falling Leaf.]

Yes! That's why I backtrack while writing so often. If something does feel right, I don't keep it. I guess you could say that the backspace button and I are extremely close acquaintances.

[Brian M. Peeples]

Haha Goes for the same with my short stories and novels!

[Danielle]

Realy Beautiful. It sets a scene in the cold night and moves towards the bright of day that only love can bring.

[Brian M. Peeples]

Thank you, I appreciate the comment. I love winter because of its beauty, but also because of all the mixed emotions it brings into a person's life. Spring tends to bring a new beginning, Summer tends to bring those hot, warm days where you either want to go out and do something or sit back and relax all day, Autumn brings the need and want to go for walks along roads with colorful leaves falling from trees, and making a scene of beauty to marvel each year, and Winter simply connects all of the emotions felt throughout all the seasons. The beauty, the journey through life, the death and preparations for the rebirth of all life, which comes in Spring, and pretty much the renewal of life. It truly and simply is a wonderful time of year.

[bee]

Beautiful..... 'glimmer of hope' heart touching words. Keep up the good work.

[Brian M. Peeples]

Thanks! And I will. My heart is the the pen is, and I could never end my writing days. It'd be as though I'd lost a huge part of me. I appreciate the review. And I hope you'll enjoy more of my writing in the future!

[bee]

I know for sure that I will :)

[Ghost of Jupiter]

A beautiful winter piece full of romance... Well done. :)

[Brian M. Peeples]

Thanks! Your words put a smile on my face. I appreciate the positive compliment and will definitely try to keep writing such poetry. :)