Thin Ice

Thin Ice

A Poem by Shapeshifter
"

This is for and old friend lost to me...

"

Good friend, gone in a seconds time

Never knowing the true meaning of life

I caught you creeping round the corner

Dagger twisting deeper in my heart

Counter love with all you hate

You know I'll stick around in the end

Fix the fracture with some time,

Clear the countless clutter from our minds

I never meant to hurt you no,

Just wish you'd said goodbye before hello

It's an ever thinning ice we skate

Trying all too hard to break the pace

Don't do it for me, for yourself

When the hammer falls

Well never know

© 2008 Shapeshifter


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

thanks for the review. im glad you saw the intense emotion underneath. most of my writing tends to free form and more often than not, ill get a line that creeps in and dosent make sense to me at first, but i assure you it has its place.

Posted 14 Years Ago


nice,
enjoyed reading this,

overall, there is a nice flow to this, held my attention from start till end, but i didn't see the relevance of the line "when the hammer falls" to the rest of this piece. there is strong emotion here and with that i say,
good job

Posted 14 Years Ago


This one was painful, not to read, but to feel, the feeling you embue this one with is quite raw and fitting. I enjoyed the succinct yet soft statements, you cleverly succeeded in communicating your views on a friendship ruined. Powerful work.

Posted 16 Years Ago


"Counter love with all you hate"

I can really relate to this poem, and you've written it very very strongly.
Great poem, and wonderful imagery.

Posted 16 Years Ago



Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

227 Views
4 Reviews
Rating
Added on August 22, 2008

Author

Shapeshifter
Shapeshifter

Raleighwood, NC



About
I consider myself and old soul knowing things I can't yet explain. I take it slow and stare past the surface where all things are eventually revealed. I plan to use this new energy for good, (maybe).... more..

Writing
Surreal Surreal

A Poem by Shapeshifter


Ronin Ronin

A Poem by Shapeshifter



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Depression Depression

A Poem by Khance


learn. learn.

A Poem by Lady Lazarus.