Demon Haze

Haze wrapped around the clouds tonight

Caught in a rage I run, nowhere to hide

From myself running against this tide

Gasoline burns, crystalizing prophecies

Sun, it tears apart my skin

Unmasking the war within

Never look into the fight

Throwing fists into the night 

This demon conqures all of me

Crushing what are left of dreams

Always looking out, not in

To kill this evil one within

Mother feel my skin, I've killed many men

Razors that crush hearts of peace

Impaling souls on wich I tread

Faith no more in what was real

Still to weak to feel or heal

Corroded  slate can't be erased

So purge this mind that is a waste

My venom is a bitter taste

The devil he must shy away,

An equal counterpart he's made

This maze that I shall never solve

I wrap my hands around the hold

To turn the blocks unlock the stone

And find the demon boy alone

Reviews

[FoolsGold23]

Wow, I enjoyed every dark line of this!! vehement and beautiful, crafted as only a tormented soul can think, I admire the hard hitting points the speaker makes in this one, Well done, Brava! *claps*~P

[Angelic Darkness]

This is a deep, dark poem. Our own inner demons sometimes
want to get the best of us.

*phrophecies- prophecies
Sun it tears apart my skin....there needs to be a comma after sun
Still to weak to feel or heal....."too"
The devil he must shy away...comma behind devil
An equall counterpart he's made..."equal"

This is my favorite lines: Mother feel my skin, I've killed many men

Razors that crush hearts of peace

Impaling souls on wich I tread

These words are the most compelling.

AD

[Tainted Angel]

Whoa. That was deep. I dont even give a crap about the typos! That was an awsome poem. And you even made it rhyme! Holy cray, extra points! This is definitly a new favorite on my list!