Nightmare

Some new haiku's I've been toying with.

She sleeps in silence

Thoughts tossing her like a wave

Peach cream skin turns to white

Reviews

[julian3]

An air of subdued foreboding blankets this piece and interestingly, places the reader in the position of uninvited observer in the private moments of another. Dark but enjoyable.

[lauren emily]

This is really good! I love how you showed the feelings of a nightmare from an overhead shot, as I like to call it.

Nice work,
~Lauren