Sacred Garden

A tribute to God and my Muse...

SACRED GARDEN

           The             

                  forbidden

                          fruit,

from

our garden that      thrives.     In our Eden the

sacred tree of knowledge           hangs while I yearn for

wisdom’s whisper. This Red Delicious apple, a grenade ticking

in the ear of original sin cures the pangs, but not the hunger, that has

plagued humanity since it began. The food of human want feeds the

body but not the soul. Ravish me lavishly, sync your breath in my mind.

I so ache for your lips, plead for your kiss, and that connection

we both can’t deny. Tongues of flames float over our heads in joyful

glee, this Pentecost of  needs. This, the food of the spirit, moves

the already planted seeds. To the core of forever more the Raven’s

wings guide, though the razor claws chide, in your flame I want

to soon abide. Sing to me, bring to me your deep desires and I will

grant your every whim, my Angel, my All, my Seraphim. Dear

God, please send me a sign to show me the path and give me the strength.

My Angel, My Muse, a messenger of you, feeds me, seeds me, with my

every wish. This, the food of the spirit moves, while the food of the

body only helps me to exist. I thrive on Your Divine grace and your

guiding light. Your beacon in this darkness is the light at the end

of the tunnel. Please do not forsake me, I, your most humble

subject. Within our winged flames, we are protected… the

time need only be selected of when we, My Muse will

meet to begin our greatest adventure. With this, the

sacred food of the spirit, all wisdom grows, and

my heart I give to you beats finally alive

and for you …… it began to stir.

Reach               out to me.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Eve was curious and gullible wouldn't you say? I think it was a set-up... I insist it was!
(see K's goofy grin)

It doesn't seem practical to me, to create such a fallible being and then allow her to cross paths with the father of lies. The snake, such great symbolism, I can hear him hissss

"Did He really say you'd die... sssss?"

I have been led astray by a snake or two. History does have a tendency to repeat... yes?

I love the shape the poem takes, the apple. It even looks like there is a bite out of it. You ever wonder why the biggest worry after the deed was done, was the nakedness? More symbolism I guess. Standing before supreme authority completely exposed. Doesn't even feel to me like the bite was the problem, harbinger of problem... maybe. Not sure where I am going with that.

Flaming tongues, Pentecost of needs... forbidden fruit was a symptom of the bigger problem of discontent.........

I am stretching.

I am dissatisfied by many things in my life. I have recently made big changes, I have bitten the apple so to speak. I have revealed the truth and in doing so I am exposed. Uncomfortable a little, but so completely liberating. Maybe it doesn't jive. I mean if we are to accept the story of the garden verbatim, Adam and Eve had it made, it was everything anyone would think that they would want, or was it?

Bread we've earned always tastes better than that we receive from the soup kitchen. However grateful we are, however charitable our benefactor there is still an imbalance of power... oh so telling of my life,,, yes.

"With this, the
sacred food of the spirit, all wisdom grows"

I certainly hope so I am already 44 it is now or never.

I see many facets of this work. Seduction and inspiration, a desire for something more. That is why we were made, it is what life is all about.

You rock.

Thanks

K

[Raef C. Boylan]

"internak" rhyming? Lol, sorry. Internal.

[Raef C. Boylan]

I really admire how well the shaping of this works. Nice internak rhyming also

Liked these images, amongst others:
"This Red Delicious apple, a grenade ticking
in the ear of original sin cures the pangs, but not the hunger, that has
plagued humanity since it began."

Red Delicious is a modern brand, right? Kind of cool how that's mingled in with the other, more timeless, aspects of this piece.

I'm not sure if this just used Eden for an analogy or if it's a religious poem; I guess it could be applied to many different contexts. As an atheist, I prefer to think of it in non-religious terms.

Lots of interesting language. Clever format.
Overall, nice write. Thanks for posting it.

[Emily B]

Wow! Word and form work so well together here. This is incredibly creative.

[Brianna Brie]

Wow your creativity is showing strong here. Super poem!!

[Ashley]

this is really a great poem. i like how it's shaped like an apple. good work.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

What a wonderful poem - truly exquisite in its form and the story it tells is gripping and full of longing. Thank you for sharing. Great work.
Light,
Siddartha