Today's Pape

I thought she would have stayed for breakfast

shared a cup of coffee and some morning chit chat

but she was gone before I even crawled my a*s out of bed

there was a note taped to my dresser mirror

written in lipstick

It simply said "never again"

After reading the letter

I put it to my nose

smelled her one last time

smiled

stuck the note back on the mirror 

shuffled down the hallway to take a piss -

As I stood in morning stupor

watching the flow fall into the toilet

I kept wondering what the hell I did so wrong

but then again it may not have been what I did

but what I didn't do

I'm not really sure at this point

I then walked back down the hall

took a left and descended the staircase

I could see the sun coming in through my white curtains

opened the door

the paper had not yet arrived

I was hoping to find her in the kitchen...

she wasn't there

I made some coffee

sat down at my oak table

wishing I had the day's paper

Reviews

[*^*my*beautiful*zelda*l..]

I've noticed that you make the mood of the poem as bland and stale as the event, which is a good thing, mind you. I like the bitter-sweet feel to it. nice work, good format! ^^

[Nyida Strong]

Is your love life as non-existant as mine? Seems to be. While I have nothing to fill the nights, you seem to have an endless flow of women. Women who seem to be attracted to the poet but nothing more? This piece is so sad, like the morning after a one night stand. Bitter taste of stale beer left on the tongue.

N. Strong

[Danielle Asher]

one of my favorite pieces of writings is like this. just shooting the s**t, telling the story of what happen today but it somehow ends up being a poem with a fabulous last line that brings it all together. You sound like you are just being honest and yet it comes out sounding so poetic. I really enjoyed it. I love the way you described the note, and the way you thought about it afterwards.
good piece.

peace,
-Danielle

[Alex Walters]

Even though I can't relate, I still say it's a good piece.
I find it entertaining with sarcarstic like humor.

Forgive me if i'm wrong, But it seems like this poem is through the eyes of a player, in the way that he can deal with it so easily.

[Adam Greenfield]

Nice. We all find life in a new day in many different ways and this was a good, fun example of that. I like the written style of it, just a rolling story simply stated. Great write.