I liked this one a lot. It's very optimistic, and full of simplicity, yet there's a definite reach towards something that not everyone can find--friendship. Furthermore, if you were to change the title to something related to a deeper meaning, it could add a zest to the poem previously unheard of. It could relate to God, to death, to maintaining a friendship when one moves away, maintaining a friendship after life gets in the way, etc. and this poem shows all these elements. It could totally allude to something higher, or elude to something deep, and I'm glad to have read it. Good stuff :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
thank you for your kind words. It is only a working title for now.
I liked this one a lot. It's very optimistic, and full of simplicity, yet there's a definite reach towards something that not everyone can find--friendship. Furthermore, if you were to change the title to something related to a deeper meaning, it could add a zest to the poem previously unheard of. It could relate to God, to death, to maintaining a friendship when one moves away, maintaining a friendship after life gets in the way, etc. and this poem shows all these elements. It could totally allude to something higher, or elude to something deep, and I'm glad to have read it. Good stuff :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
thank you for your kind words. It is only a working title for now.
I started writing in 8th grade when the teacher put up a writing prompt for our journal and the story just flowed from my pen. I have had several poems published. I am currently going through my poe.. more..