Strange Night Birds

Last night I wrote this listening to these birds singing in the palm trees.

Darkened palm tree
Standing before me
Shadowed in the
Night's Majesty

Stars were sprinkled around us as
some foreign bird sang a chilling
trill from the dark
To my surprise
A whole choir joined in--
I stood and let
the notes whistle 'round my ears
Then they stopped
One

     By
        One
             And

They left us to the stars

 

Good night,

strange night birds

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad, and I really like the image you've presented here. I think, though, that the little downwards spiral could exclude the 'and' at the end. It would make more sense without it, I think. Either way, this is very good. Well done.