Still Life

A freestyle poem about being relevant.

My whole life I've been "i"rrelevant.

But, I'm relevant.

I carry the

pride of two races some

die in a race they won.

Some cry on shoulders or pillow cases.

Dried flowers next to broken vases.

Another drop in a sea of broken faces.

I'm broken but fixing to be a legend.

I've been rejected 6 times.

Now, this is my 7th Heaven.

Bless me or curse me, they heard me.

And they see me

achieving dreams that I foresaw

when life was just a wrecking ball.

I was racing downhill to nowhere.

Past signs saying "Don't go there!".

Past friends that I haven't seen

since the last year I was a teen.

My new ways grew out of these old days.

Born again without dying. 

The still life finally in motion.

Truth found after years of lying.

Author's Note

Can you relate to the journey of your own life? Feel free to share your story below...

Reviews

[Nikki]

Howdy Brent: I really enjoyed the poem. Your syntax is spot on. The lines "...rejected 6 times. / Now this is my 7th heaven" is great word choice and somehow evokes the stumbling steps we take in search of who we are to ourselves. Nice work. And yes, it relates! Oh, does it relate.

[Brent]

A couple reviewers have mentioned those lines...interesting. Absolutely I agree that we have to push ourselves to the limit to find out who we are. Glad you connect toy poem.

Thank you for your thoughtful review!

[AcasualPawn]

My life is still "i"rrelevant of me......

[Brent]

You're not alone. But, as long as we are alive, we can make ourselves relevant.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Your revelations over time form the person
you're to be,
but not still--like a still life at all.
nice structure, here in this along with reflections.

[Brent]

Yep, you nailed one of the major messages of my poem! And it's also like a still life painting as a snap shot of my life.

Thank you for your insightful review!

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Yes, a still life --one capture frozen in time!

[zaisham9393]

I'm broken but fixing to be a legend.
I've been rejected 6 times.
Now, this is my 7th Heaven.
Bless me or curse me, they heard me

This is awesome! Loved it!
Thank you for sharing!

[Brent]

Great, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for your friendly review!

[zaisham9393]

No problem!

[Kay J.]

Amazing! Never let your struggled chain you down. This poem is kind of uplifting to me and inspiring. I love it!

[Brent]

Definitely we're often one of the biggest if not the biggest obstacle in the way of our goals! Glad you enjoyed my poem.

Thanks for your friendly review!

[Kate Z.]

Good thoughts. The real win is the death of the old lies! This is a life lesson that many never learn. Keep going forward!

[Brent]

Yes being honest with our self relieves us of such stress and bitterness. Important life lesson!
read moreYes being honest with our self relieves us of such stress and bitterness. Important life lesson!

Thank you for your encouraging words!

[Suchita]

Well done, great feat! Was a good read, yes I can relate to all those emotional lines, but I too haven't given up, so I can relate to that as well.

I have been through all you've described so beautifully-starting with the line-some die in a race they won...

So I'm here to give hope to all those who've given up, who've been through what you wrote but gave up, coz I haven't-given up.

I, I reinvent myself everyday when I look in the mirror, I try to be the best rather than let things be, I've cried my heart out knowing I had a choice not to, I've seen the illusions of pride when victory knocked-me down, but still I dont give up, coz everyday is a new day, a new gift from God to do whatever you can...

Good writing
Pls keep sharing

[Brent]

Your words are inspiring and I hope people who read this poem look at your review! I'm glad you stay true to yourself and try to be your best everyday.

A person once told me a quote that's stuck with me, "Every morning, you have the choice to either get up or stay in bed. No one forces you to do either option. You can get up or stay in bed all day. The world will keep moving."

Thank you for your encouraging words!

[Suchita]

poem is brilliant, I need not say, just that you asked to write about your own experiences, so was doing that. I wish to read more of your poems.

[Ayvid N]

Feeling the inner strength and motivation in each line...It was great to read.

[Brent]

Excellent, glad I conveyed inner strength and motivation.

Thank you for your kind review!

[PandaPeaceful]

I love the wording and the meaning behind your poem. Good job!

[Brent]

Glad you liked my poem. It's a solid reflection of my life so far.

Thank you for your encouraging words!

[PandaPeaceful]

No problem. You deserve it!

[Ian P. Albrecht]

tl;dr, You're only irrelevant when you stop trying. Maybe that's an over-simplification, but that's what I got out of it. The funny thing is that's the attitude that has lead me here. Go figure. :)

Thanks for sharing.

[Brent]

I agree! As long as we keep trying, we are relevant. Eventually, we'll hit a level of greater exposure where we are relevant on a larger scale.

Thanks for your insightful review!