shall we forgive the moon?

 

The moon is a traitor.
His love is scarce.
He’s not loyal like the sun.
His greetings are not courteous as her’s,
nor lasting.
He abandons us in our hour of need,
leaving us with feeble sparks of stars,
to look after us.
I guess the sight of us nightly bores him
after a while.
It drains his lurid luminance,
so he hides
In sight.
Looking elsewhere,
contemplating in the somber threads of space,
like a monk in isolation.
being grateful,
he's not a human.


But it’s in the gloom
Where wickedness  sits on her throne
Spreading her vile arms,
to touch the dead
and the living.  
Shall we excuse the moon then,
for looking elsewhere!
Will the sun bear,
what he witnesses nightly?

It’s in the gloom
Where virtue lays in sepulcher,
gazing at
the dingy vacancy of souls,
ready to die.
shall we excuse the moon then,
for looking elsewhere!

Reviews

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful, Latifa. The moon and the sun in a dance together, a duet. I like the sun more than the moon, but the moon is more mysterious, I think. Well done. :) Rudi

[Solar]

I like the way the moon is made masculine and the sun feminine - a refreshing difference from the usual depictions.

Oh these lines are superb!
'contemplating in the somber threads of space,
like a monk in isolation.'

[dabblingrosalie]

Loved the imagery and language use. Very reminiscent of Edgar Allen Poe in my opinion, and I thoroughly enjoyed it.

[JaneFoxscale]

Such amazing thoughts and parrellels, I loved it!

[Daisy Ackerman]

Love the alliteration in "lurid luminance." Also interesting because the moon is usually personified as a "she" but you do the opposite. I like this a lot!

[Sai]

This is a very fascinating poem. Usually people use the moon as a way to explore how lovely it is but you did the exact opposite. Amazing!

[Sami Khalil]

A very unique and different take on the moon. You leave no excuses. Wonderful, Fatima...:)...........

[Carolynn]

I think we need to :) what a fabulous poem - it flows so nicely as you read it and you get drawn right into it. I like to think of the sun as love and the moon as faith - even when we can't see it we can trust that it's still there :)

[ANTO]

I like the idea of the moon off meditating before going back to that bloody job !!
We'll forgive him but we won't forget.

Loved the line 'virtue lies in sepulchre' - class!

[A. Amos]

This was deep and some lines were amazing... Even the moon is thankful for not being human!