Ain't no Freedom

pray for me my fellow writers, this is a crucial time of my life.

fractured, fragile, flying
ain't no more flying
the feathers are soaked in water
ain't no more flying

blunt,  brute ,blades of ego
cuts the wings and soak the feather in water
blunt,brute, blades of the old man's ego
gash the young bird's wings with ego
ain't no more flying

hell, ain't no freedom!
hell, ain't no living!
slavery has worn the cloak of ego
to hang the bird's freedom

Reviews

[ROXANE DORSEY]

yes we do bring one another down. like the naval academy trying to replace a hat by way of slippery lard. thanks for sharing this wonderful poem.

[Latifa]

thank you for your kind review :)

[marcus]

we oppress ourselves by enslaving one another!!

[B]

I like this alot

You are very talented
Ego is very much personified strongly in this piece

Great job

[Latifa]

thank you for the review :)

[C. Rose]

I like the alliteration and repetition. I feel like this should be said out loud.
I like the idea of blades of ego.

The metaphor is chilling. I imagine the sad anger of a bird who knows the sky, unable to return to it because of damaged wings.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review :)

[Parimal Pratyush]

Freedom is valuable and with every work of yours that I read, I can feel that pain, that struggle.. It's so moving, motivational and mind blowing of the passion you have for it. I love you for this. :D

[Latifa]

thank you for this wonderful review Parimal, looking forward to read some of your great poetry.

[Ruth]

Hang on to the inner light love...sending you peace and calm and strength ♥

[Latifa]

thank you Poppy.

[Avinash]

Your words for liberation continue to stir me deep. You should do everything to make sure it happens in your lifetime.

[Latifa]

thank you.

[R Smith]

harsh emotions Latifa, this is a very tough time in your life i'm guessing, you can use anger and suffering to create and you have done so here :)

[Shane Mohamed]

I wondered where you've been. Are you okay? Let me know if there's anyway I could help.

[Latifa]

thank you, I'm better now, but this problem isn't goi_ng anywhere any time soon, it's something I have to live with and accept until the dawn of freedom shall come inshallah.

[Shane Mohamed]

I wish you the best Latifa. Stay faithful.

[Alfred Kukitz]

All things come back to strike the ego's soul.