THE MENDING FLOWERS

rough times are very hard to swallow.

The owl howls high above,

swirling sorrows straps the soul:

fly no more like a dove

the blessed beats of heart beat to lull.

fingers fumble through the fog of salvation,

muted mouths learn to mimic

pleading prayers of supplication,

 while the daunting demons allude to dreaded gimmicks.

cry crystal tears

cry cold calls of fears

time teases the restlessness,

steering seconds into sluggish carelessness.

gallop the grinds to gasp the ease

sail your sadness over seas

wallop,wallop the jeering hours

plow the plants of the mending  flowers.

Reviews

[fireblossom]

Lovely use of alliteration. Lovely word play gives your poem music. A wonderful poem.

[Sam]

Simple alliteration. Lovely to read.

[Jamil Isimbabi]

good poem but i feel the need to rhyme forced some unrhyming ideas clash with the beauty of the poem

[Norah]

Very profound, great write Latifa :)

[Mary Bosworth]

This is a simply lovely and compelling piece - awesome work here, thank you for sharing this with us

[Christopher Robin]

Nice couplet changeover Latifa, again this suffers from a slight lack of cadence but I see you growing stronger and stronger. The message is bold, clear and cogent which is refreshing. Watching you get better every time is simply amazing :)

-Robin

[Daydreamer]

"cry crystal tears
cry cold calls of fears
time teases the restlessness,
steering seconds into sluggish carelessness."

This was written with such wisdom and depth. So many layers and so many interpretations to this poem.
A very strong write, Latifa. Well done.

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, good rhymes, a poem with a clear message; good job here !

[Namrata]

Plow the plants of the mending flowers - you got me there. You write and amaze me, really.

[Latifa]

thank you Namrata for the review

[Blake Fodor]

This is a simply stunning write. I so loved this piece and admire your skill

[Latifa]

thank you Blake for the review