floating aimlessly

needing urge to feel alive once again and embrace it's beauty

Floating aimlessly.....

I need a sign

Like the walking dead

I'm hypnotized to fulfill the daily charts

Perplexing and shackling!

 Confusion has closed my third eye

 And the flask of reasons has dried up

With no drops of elixir peace

My soul is thirsty

 So I’m loading for the kairos

And begging to hear a saving susurrus

 

Author's Note

kairos means the perfect moment when everything falls into place.
susurrus is a low soft sound, sort of whispering.

Reviews

[Jamil Isimbabi]

thought provoking and deep

[stars are far]

this is very amazing.felt like it has a spiritual aspect ..
well done :)

[Mark]

There is ebb and flow in all human endeavors. The trick is to know when to fight against it and when to go with it I think.

[Zahra]

Very nice and thought provoking. Loved it

[Aftab Alam]

Your idea is the most smittening part of your poetry

[Hatchling]

This is just perfect Latifa!

[Latifa]

thank you very much Fluttershy

[Hatchling]

You're very welcome

[ron]

Beautiful. And thank you for saying what "kairos" and "susurrus" mean.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review Ron

[ron]

You are most welcome Lafita.

[ron]

*Latifa* sorry for the misspelling of your name.

[Latifa]

it's okey ...)...

[Frieda P]

No confusion in your writing, I quite like this whispering of a poem, nicely pen'd Latifa.

[Latifa]

thank you Frieda for the review.

[Frieda P]

The pleasure was mine Latifa.

[Michael]

Very nice work Latina. The flow and feeling is excellent. I do have a couple of questions. First, in the last line, what is your context for using "pegging?". As it has a vulgar slang meaning, I wonder if you truly meant to use begging. Second, for the sake of flow, the line "With no drops of elixir peace" would flow better as "With no drops of peace's elixir."

I have read the line "And the flask of reasons has dried up" several time now. Grammatically it suggests you mean a vessel called the flask of reasons. If that is the intent, spot on. On the other hand, if the intent is to describe a lack of reason, it needs the singular noun and reads better as something like "And the flask of reason has dried up".

Please do not take this too critically, all the points are technical and open for debate. From the standpoint of enjoyment, it needs nothing.

[Latifa]

thank you so very much friend for the critics, for the first one I meant begging , it's just a typo error , I thank you for pointing to it and for the rest I like your adjustment
as for the flask of reasons I meant as you thought a vessel called the flask of reasons
thank you once again I'll edit the mistakes .

[K.N. Lorenzen]

A very beautiful poem, Latifa :) You evoke a lot with few words!
"Confusion ha(s) closed my third eye"
"The flask of reasons ha(s) dried up"

very well done!

K.

[Latifa]

thank you for the constructive review

[K.N. Lorenzen]

You are most welcome, Latifa:)
Keep up the good work!

[Latifa]

thank you once again ...)...