Commandments

Commandments

A Poem by Latifa
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trust,believe and be patient

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thou shalt not stride upon the pebbles timidly
thou shalt embed  the iron feet and crack the pebbles
thou shalt not fear the power of the wonder
thou shalt wonder and yield to ponder
thou shalt not hook your neck to the noose of dubiety
thou shalt touch the celestial roofs of faith
thou shalt not question the wisdom of divinity
thou shalt hand your liberty to the caring providence
thou shalt not surrender to the urging velleity
thou shalt crave to the untouchable blessing of serenity

© 2013 Latifa


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very hip...possibly blasphemous 2...but I like it nonetheless

Posted 11 Years Ago


Your now really reaching out, am really thrilled to read your new stuffs, your new writes are really very passionable reading. Your writes're filled with deep thoughts and with some dominant words.
Keep writing!
Your going very good in this writing field!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I see the wisdom in your "new" commandments, other than perhaps in seven and eight which seem to divest the individual of his free will, which God has not done. You are wise beyond your years, Latifa. Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


good
mike emil approves
HAI!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Trust, believe, and be patient.


Posted 11 Years Ago


Latifa

11 Years Ago

thank you hon
thou shalt crave to the untouchable blessing of serenity

Some good advice. Loved the inclusiveness of this last line. Beautiful.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Latifa

11 Years Ago

thank you dear
Beautiful words and prayers. Good to know ways of others. Allow us to understand the world with a better vision. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Latifa

11 Years Ago

thank you for the read friend
God uses those wonderful edicts for ethics and law which governs individuals and societies in the Bible or the Koran. The first 5 commandments in the Torah deal with our relationship with God and the other 5 deal with our relationships with each other. I hope you are not competing with God here ( lol just kidding ) but you are complimenting those great ones...A splendid work...:)...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

Wow. Wonderfully said...You are welcome...:).................
Latifa

11 Years Ago

thank you friend
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

:).............
Your use of the formal second person plural gives this a a biblical character, this a revised ten commandments, fine idea, like this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Latifa

11 Years Ago

it was kind of coincidence that I wrote 10 lines and they have the same aspect like the bible

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