fearful scattered thoughts

the greatest enemy resides within

Crumbled bread i follow
                                  To the scattered signs
The hidden bushes are blazing
          No longer able to survive
                                  Concealed mystic longing is sitting around
The haunted voices are sneaking
                             Deeper with  marching armies
                                  And the sentinels are petrified
                   Phantom of desires and lust is dragging the sturdy spirit
  The mountains are falling
                                                  And the skies strongly collide
The alibis are choking
                                                                         And the doors are slamming to the lies
 

Reviews

[MsJewel]

So many great lines in this one, if I were to pick my favorite, I'd be reciting the entire poem. Love the format "scattered". Wonderful writing my friend.

:) Julie

[Latifa]

thank you dear

[Ruth]

Like thoughts of the soul set to a warm breeze...gathered and defragmented...this is soul food...beautifully layered xx

[Latifa]

thanks love

[Sheila Kline]

The way you have formatted your poem is a nice compliment to the title as they are scattered without a set structure. I think this adds to the relevance of your message.

The greatest enemy resides within when we allow the committee in our heads to convince us that we are the one who is at fault! Our desires may consume us if we are unable to control the right amount of need - within confines so to say.

Excellent thoughts with outstanding metaphors!

[Latifa]

thank you honey for your wonderful review

[Sami Khalil]

A wonderful poem Latifa full of great lines. The greatest enemy like they say is the evil self...Bravo

[Latifa]

thank you Sami

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Dr. Wood ?]

clever words Latifa, but should it be The Phantom of DESIRES...not diseres.........There are some crazy and quite brilliant lines here

[Latifa]

thanks for the note i'll edit it

[Angel]

The alibis are shocking............And the doors are slamming to the lies

Oh, I love, love, love, LOVE these lines!!!!!

[Latifa]

thank you honey

[Tiffany Boles]

I like it the way it's written, it holds a strong message.

[Latifa]

thank you darling for the read