fearful scattered thoughts

the greatest enemy resides within

Crumbled bread i follow
                                  To the scattered signs
The hidden bushes are blazing
          No longer able to survive
                                  Concealed mystic longing is sitting around
The haunted voices are sneaking
                             Deeper with  marching armies
                                  And the sentinels are petrified
                   Phantom of desires and lust is dragging the sturdy spirit
  The mountains are falling
                                                  And the skies strongly collide
The alibis are choking
                                                                         And the doors are slamming to the lies
 

Reviews

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

I think this poem have a political theme.

[Latifa]

acually it doesn't
thanks for the read

[Emerald Seas]

There's a nice beat, rhythm to this poem. There must be a contest going... 3d poem with a similar theme I've read tonight.
Very cool, dark, and mysterious looking within.

[Latifa]

thank you darling

[Strider Marcus Jones]

Imaginative, rhythmic, powerful images. This rocks. 100/100

[Latifa]

thank you Strider

[OTownPete]

Man this sounds like a farly apt description of our two house of Congress althought I'm sure that's not what you were going for.

[Baby Ricochet]

Good closing line.............................

[TL Boehm]

the alibis are shocking and the doors are slamming to the lies. THis is a powerful write.

[Latifa]

thank you dear

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the structure, the broken phrases..

[Latifa]

thank you for the read

[Hatchling]

Great poem! Keep the great work. On a side note captialize your I's

[Latifa]

thank you dear

[Pryde Foltz]

The alibis are shocking
And the doors are slamming to the lies

Isn't it funny. You wouldn't think we could lie to ourselves. Yet, at this we seem most adept. Awesome write.

[Latifa]

thank you hon

[Lydia Shutter]

The way you arranged your words was perfect for the title of your poem...scattered thuoghts and scattered words across the page. Intense and powerful, your words pack a punch.....good one. Lydi**

[Latifa]

thank you darling