fearful scattered thoughts

the greatest enemy resides within

Crumbled bread i follow
                                  To the scattered signs
The hidden bushes are blazing
          No longer able to survive
                                  Concealed mystic longing is sitting around
The haunted voices are sneaking
                             Deeper with  marching armies
                                  And the sentinels are petrified
                   Phantom of desires and lust is dragging the sturdy spirit
  The mountains are falling
                                                  And the skies strongly collide
The alibis are choking
                                                                         And the doors are slamming to the lies
 

Reviews

[Avinash]

When lust overtakes ..at that moment nothing exists..its quite intense but at the same I can sense some amount of fear in it.

[Mike Emil]

throw my moldy bread
out for the damn birds
HAI!!!

think they appreciate it?
hell no!!!
HAI!!!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Phantom of desires and lust is dragging the sturdy spirit

Good line. :)

[rutherford]

Powerful images. "skies strongly collide" among the best.

[Hannah]

I really enjoyed this... You've got such a beautiful flow and your imagery is powerful... I love the way you described the chaos of the mind and how inherently dangerous it can often be, how it can lead us astray... Such an accurate representation of how we can end up being our own worst enemy but we only realise too late.. Loved it, great work.

[Ronnie]

I have read a few of your poems now, you definitely have a cadence to your flow, it makes you ponder and take the lines in.

[smurfett]

Very nice poet, thank for sharing

[Will Neill]

Latifa, I have just read a few of your poems, you certainly have a way with words. I never profess to being a poet, I only dabble when the mood takes so I never feel qualified enough to comment . You certainly have a unique style making the reader think carefully about what is hidden in each piece of your work. If thats what you have set out to do then you have succeeded.
Nice Work.
Will

[Latifa]

thank you for your kind words Will

[Joyce S. Greene]

Sounds like the whole world is tumbling down on top of you, Latifa. Has a tragedy just occurred? Your images are striking and vital. Lots of dreaming room in this one.

[Latifa]

well thankfully it's not , thank you for the read

[wordwarrior]

Wow, now here's such a lot within this poem. It's deep and very thought provoking. Those inner demons grab us in so many different way.
Love the imagery and strength of this

[Latifa]

thanks honey