fearful scattered thoughts

the greatest enemy resides within

Crumbled bread i follow
                                  To the scattered signs
The hidden bushes are blazing
          No longer able to survive
                                  Concealed mystic longing is sitting around
The haunted voices are sneaking
                             Deeper with  marching armies
                                  And the sentinels are petrified
                   Phantom of desires and lust is dragging the sturdy spirit
  The mountains are falling
                                                  And the skies strongly collide
The alibis are choking
                                                                         And the doors are slamming to the lies
 

Reviews

[Ian Gilmour]

The imagery and the flow here are truly in sync. This is powerful and the subtle religious parallels fit very well and take the poem to a different level, well done.

[Black Star Adept]

This is a very well written piece!!! Simply amazing

[Susan Beth Horvath]

Masterfully written.... The details and descriptive language are first rate

[SANDEEP SHETTY]

The imagery you presented here...is quite complicated and scary...deep within.... :)

[Coyote Poetry]

The lines were strong and hidden story in between the words. I wanted to read more. The poem open the door to long conversations with no real answers. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Alfred Kukitz]

Good energy! This piece scared me a bit. It was so good reality started to impinge on the poem's theory!

[kublakhan27]

This is the first piece I've read by you and I'm blown away...the images and form are incredibly striking...I loved the bit about haunting voices and petrified sentinels...the feeling of fear is unavoidable in these words, yet there is almost an element of hope in the idea of the doors slamming to the lies...awesome piece all around :)

[Latifa]

thank you for the encouraging review

[John Anderson]

Fabulous work. Thought your poem was unique and very cleverly written. Well done!

[Latifa]

thank you for the fabulous review

[Parimal Pratyush]

To be able to think this way is very rare. I love the way this poem hides fear and expressed thoughts that are a result of it. This is beautiful :)

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[wordman]

ahh the power of persuasion the need for love and the passion of thought in our minds