clarity

sometimes thing seems so blurry that you just have to take a stand and rethink

Whirl around whirl

Whirl into the endless swirl

To find the elixir pearl

In a delicate moment of placid whim

When the sunbeams have come to dim

And the moon saluted with striking grin

With countless stars you rally your sin

Repent from the devouring hymn

Picking yourself from the slippery brim

Making the everlasting vow

Turning the table now

Rising from the burdening bow

Beating the odds no matter how

Reviews

[Saddam]

Making the everlasting vow
Turning the table now
Rising from the burdening bow
Beating the odds no matter how.

Very nice poem. Great write. Lovely.

[Mike Emil]

reminds me
of my old turntable
love records
HAI!!
better then this digital crap
HAI!!! again!!!

[Hannah]

This is so accurate and you've described it so beautifully, you leave me captivated at the end of every line... There are always those moments in life where we need to find our feet again and regain perspective, although the feeling of being caught up in whirl after whirl to the point where everything else suddenly becomes blurry can also be quite a worthwhile feeling while it lasts... I enjoyed this a lot, thank you :)

[Ronnie]

A good build up to the final line, well done.

[OTownPete]

A strong call for belief and positivity is contained in the piece

[Latifa]

thanks for the read

[Ruth]

Your imagery and balance of metaphor are always wonderful hon xx

[Latifa]

thank you dear

[Leslie Philibert]

A writer I know well, who writes very well, she has a feeling for English ...very good !

[Latifa]

thank you for your lovely words

[khalid]

very nicely penned with ni9ce flow of metaphor and nice images. well done

[Latifa]

thank you Khalid

[Tiffany Boles]

Ah! I love it, nicely written!

[Latifa]

thank you dear

[TL Boehm]

This reminds me of a dance with rises and falls and rhythm - wonderfully penned .

[Latifa]

thanks for the lovely review