The Last Strike

So maybe I do make castles out of dirt,

But does that mean that their words don't hurt?

Does that mean that their actions don't wound me somehow?

Now don't have a cow

When I say they're acting immature,

Picking on the smallest child

When they should really walk a mile

In her shoes.

What's left for me to lose?

The last shreds of self respect?

Maybe they're just jealous of my intellect,

Although I doubt it, I'm not all that smart.

My mind wanders from me like a loose go-cart,

It thinks and does things I don't want it to do,

So can we please keep this from me to you?

 

They don't see how hard I work nor do they care,

They're like a pack of wolves and I'm a small hare.

I wonder if they knew

What I go through

On a daily basis

Would that change their faces?

Would that change their minds?

Would that allow me to put our past behind

Us and start a new friendship?

Then what happens to all my hardships?

Were they futile? Do they matter?

Now I just sound like that mad hatter.

It seems like I'm just questioning with no answers,

The questions are floating in my mind like some of those ballet dancers.

Someone help me decipher my life?

I think I'm down to my last strike.

Author's Note

Could use some work. But it's what I feel. Even if it does just sound like a million questions. That's what's going on in my mind.

Reviews

[Steph K]

Questioning is always a part of life, especially when we are faced with the harsh realities of our world. You portray this so well, in your perception. The paradigm shifts from the collective voice of questioning, 'Would that change their faces?
Would that change their minds?" to your own personal voice is refreshing. Great work!

[~Lizzy♬]

This poem was beautiful and yet, had a sad and heartful touch to it. I loved every line in it. Wonderful write! :)

~Lizzard~

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I believe you have penned the way many of us feel sometimes. If we could all walk a mile in some other person's shoes, we might be a little more understanding and probably quickly give those shoes back and stop feeling sorry for ourselves. Well written!

[Kelly M.]

I like this. :) It's deeply emotional, and the rhyming is perfect. It's like opening up your heart, and taking a look inside of it. :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a really good write...cause people can make you think like that....when they treat you wrong. You did a really nice job on this. Thanks for sharing.