The Seas Of Us

Total Ocean Fanatics. I love my trumpet players.

My thoughts of you outnumber the grains of sand in the shore,

When you leave my side, you leave me wanting more

Like the waves in the ocean, your feelings are unpredictable

And the dimples on your chin make your lips look, oh so kissable.

 

You're the anemone and I'm the clown fish

You're always there for me, whenever I wish.

You're the predator and I'm the prey

Like a great white and a fish with no say

 

You're the wind across the seven seas while I'm the sail on a boat

Seems like our friendship is the only thing keeping me afloat

 

I'm that shark just hunting for your blood

When I see you see it my emotions start to flood

I guess I need you to survive,

I need you to feel alive.

Author's Note

Yeah, it's not all that great. Could use a bit of work. But I like it.

Reviews

[Kelly M.]

This poem is quite imaginative, slightly dreamy in the beginning, and intense in the end. Nice. :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

This poem flows so effortlessly, enjoyed it so much:)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

You make rhyming with heart appear so easy.
This was sweet work. The metaphor was spot on.
Standing Ovation.

[WordNerd]

WOW outstanding =] I love the imagery and the flow. Awesome work Suzy =]

[knowman]

Good poem, well put together I like it a lot

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the way you wrote your desires and feelings. I believe when you will know what you need and want. Are willing to share time with another. Love and life can be good.
"You're the anemone and I'm the clown fish
You're always there for me, whenever I wish."
Thank you for the outstanding poem of love and hope.
Coyote

[CharlesMonroe]

I love it to :D it's so good and beautiful and the imagery is just as much (: great job Suzy :D

[Alicia Hirshey]

I love this, and I love how you capture the ocean in it. I am in love with the ocean. I've been numerous times. Last summer included, but for me, my longing for the ocean is much more than just wanting to be there to hear the sounds and the feel of the surf. I was raised on the beach. It is my lifeline to home. This was a great poem.

[brenda]

me too i like it too!!:)