when i wake up

When i wake up

I have a smile

One i haven't had 

Since i was a child

When i wake up 

I don't remember

That you weren't here

Last December

When i wake up

I think if was a dream

Or rather a nightmare

When i realize, Its not what it seems

When i wake up 

I have only on plea

For you to be there

And stay here with me

Reviews

[A.K.F]

Not bad. Good emotion though it could due with more imagery to better paint a scene. I also recommend you capitalize the "i's". it is rather odd to only have some of them capitalized and not the others. I also am pretty sure that in line 14 you meant one instead of on.

[Bibie]

Nice piece... Just a lil mistake on line 10, i think it should be "i think it was a dream"