Once Upon A Girl.

I once knew a girl
Who sat quiet in school
And because her mouth kept shut
She wasn’t considered cool.

She was smart and bright.
And always respected the elders.
For that she was called teacher’s pet.
But she never called back an argument to the others. 

At night she stood alone,
After cleaning up, and stared at her reflection.
She traced over the flaws on her naked body.
Then considered them the reason of her rejection.

Tears fell on her pillow
Soaking it in her pain.
She prayed that maybe one day.
Someone would dry her from this rain.

She hoped that just one person
Could see through her disguise.
Could help her speak up for herself.
Could see the truth in her eyes.

When no one came, she found other outlets.
Things to take away her hurt just for a while.
Cuts on her thighs, and and empty stomach.
While she went out and faked a smile.

One night, she cried herself to sleep.
And she saw something amazing in her dream.
“Sweet girl, don’t cry,” The angel said.
She woke up and gave her soul for God to redeem.

Now this girl loves fearlessly.
She stands up and speaks her mind.
She gives without expectations.
And she searches for lost ones to find.

The girl may not seem cool.
She may be as different as can be.
But I’ll tell you a secret,
You see, that girl was me. 

Reviews

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

wow i really like this...great write

[darkgurl]

I think this one real well written piece here. You have a ability to rhyme and use your words well. I really enjoyed reading this remarkable write.

[azlamalo]

Real nice

[R. Nella]

I really liked this. I was never popular, and felt rejected by my peers, except when they wanted me for my intelligence, then they'd make an insincere effort. I actually didn't care what others thought, but I can certainly relate to the feelings of loneliness.

I wasn't expecting to see any action being taken to harm oneself, or finding a solution which worked for you. That distinguishes this from yet another poem about depression and rejection.

[Gheeneil]

The first few verses were bit sad. It spoke about circumstances in the actual setting. I can relate to it. Rejection from peers is not that easy to handle. Too many questions hovering in our head. But then, I liked the twist in the end. If one can't change others' perspection, we can always change ours. Keep writing.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Beautiful and brave poem :) ... I love it . we all have moments of confusion , especially when we are so young Yossi

[Coyote Poetry]

It is hard to find your way sometime. With life about perfection make t hard to like yourself. Each of us is different. Good and bad points. I like your ending. Need to like the person in the mirror. A powerful poem with a very good story.
Coyote