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A lust that couldn't be fead. My arms were not strong enough to hold you. You left, taking my arms from around you. The tears I cried. You didn't care. YOu eyes showed no compasion. It wasn't like you to do that. You weren't the one I fell in love with. You lightly kissed my cheek, the last I would be given from you and left without another word. I miss you, and I wish things could of changed.

Reviews

[samdraMAYHEM]

Aside from the grammar errors and distracting color, this is pretty good....i agree that you probably could expand this into a full poem.
But I know what you mean by this poem. -_-

:D keep it up.

[Jenn.]

The font color and grammar/spelling is a little distracting, but with some proofreading (maybe have someone else revise it too), it has some good potential to be expanded into a full poem or story.