Fighting for Words

she wants to tell him how she feels but she�s not sure what that feeling is b/c her mind and her heart are at war, both creating very convincing cases, but which one is right which one does she follow...and even if she picks a side which words are right

My mind is running with the speed of light.
There's things I need to tell you without picking a fight
A fight that takes place inside myself
A fight that leaves half of me crying for help

The words I need to explain exactly how I feel
Are words that don't exists yet, so baby here's the deal
I've managed to reach inside myself to find my better strength
Because I need to tell you my feelings grow for you each and everyday

I think about you constantly, Your always on my mind
And with every single word you say my lips spread into a smile
I'll even let you take my hand, I'll let you lead the way
Now my minds jogging, its found a healthy pace

Someone once told me slow and steady always wins the race
The war taking place deep inside myself has finally stopped
And come to a shocking close
Both sides have agreed to these few words I've chose:

I love you
With all my heart
Body
And soul.

Reviews

[Areya Valena]

Omg I love this. It leaves you dangling as your mind races and argues over what to say and then in the end you find the proper words, and even though they are very common, they are beautiful all the same. This reminds me of a relationship that almost never was between me and a guy. This is beautiful. Continue writing!

[-K]

very good piece :)i always love a piece that i can relate to my circumstances. tanka tanka (if you didnt already know that means thank you. yes i know, im wierd.) good job. you're a very talented artist.

[D. Moore]

I agree with Lauren. This is definitely song material. It is a great read, very well written.

[Lauren Marie]

As I read this, I kept thinking to myself, "This should be turned into a song!"
Wonderful!
~Lauren

[~amanda~]

wow. you have a way with words that is so unique! i love how you rhyme so effortlessly, it doesnt read like you sat with a rhyming dictionary like a lot of poems that rhyme (including mine) tend to do... i love the vocabulary, the imagery, and style! i really enjoyed this!!