The memories of an old man

for the please explain contest, picture 6

Today, is not much different then any other day for me anymore, I am here at my usual spot in the park, where my wife and I have to come and drink tea and have lunch, unlike the past, she is not with me today, you see, she left me about 2 weeks ago, she left for another, someone far better then me, she deserves him, his love and compassion far outweigh mine, I will miss here dearly, sometimes I cry, sometimes I scream in anger, how could he take her from me, how could he take the one good thing I had left? I will probably never know, so today I sit, and drink wine in rememberance, i fear where i must go today, I must go to her funeral, to escort her safely to Him, I will miss thee dearly my love, and put in a good word for me, I will always love you and i miss you so much my Annabelle, no matter if i see you on the other side or not, my feelings for you shall never disperse, goodbye my love, may you fly with grace upon the clouds of heaven and may your halo shine brighter then any other, May your soul rest in peace my dear, I'll be seeing you...

Author's Note

might have a few grammar or spelling issues but im on the run at this time, alot of things to do

Reviews

[Kristin Brecoe]

Just a couple of errors. Tidy things up a bit. I think that may give you a better chance at winning. I'm not too sure how particular Kristen is.

It's a nice story. A nice plot. When I saw this picture I started to think along those lines too. Perhaps if you have more time pull out the story more. =]

Those are just some suggestions.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

VERY NICE! I love where you went with this. Honestly, when I saw the picture, a wife that had passed on was my first thought (which wins you Kris points; lol). The grammar (the fact that it's all one big run-on sentence) does throw me off a bit, but the story is just to sweet to ignore. Very good piece. I'm very glad you entered!
KH