An Understatment

An Understatment

A Poem by Brandee D. Hack
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How I felt toward you never changed. Until this morning when I needed you, and you weren't there for me like you said you would ALWAYS be...

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You are my heartbeat.
I love you dearly.
Why can't you understand?

All I want it you?
But sometimes I can't believe you.
You hurt me so bad.

I stay depressed all the time.
I told you once.
I wanted you to understand.

You asked why...
So I tried to tell you.
I don't think you ever got it.

I know you say you try.
But sometimes it doesn't seem like enough.
Will we ever be okay?

I love you.
I say that a bunch.
Yet you never spell it out.

It has been nine months...
but we have made it.
Not what will become of us?

Can we change for who we truly want to be?
Can we escape the bounds of rope we made?
Can we become the true people we have always been?

Let's find out and take a leap.
I want to know if it's you I keep.

But depression is too much, when you try like I do.
And all I want is a sign from God or a clue!

© 2010 Brandee D. Hack


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This is really nice
your sense of asking questions in the poem is the thing which i like really
bcoz questions attract the readers mind and bound the reader to answer them

Moreover, poem has a great flow and a good rhyme scheme
~Aaradhya

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is really good. I noticed you may have typo though.
The stanza:
It has been nine months...
but we have made it.
Not what will become of us?
Did you mean "Now" what will become of us?

If you did mean "Not" I'm sorry
All-in-all I think this is a really good poem. Keep up the good work!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Brandee D. Hack
Brandee D. Hack

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Hello all. My name is Brandee. I have wrote many different genres of writings for many years. I hope that by putting it up that that will help me get some feedback and constructive criticism. .. more..

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