Ecstasy's Room

The sweet sensation runs down my spine.

I feel the smoke rising again.

The whisps run around my breasts,

I wonder if this is the final test?

I drown in the ecstasy is always like this

a high feeling of eternal bliss?

But then the heightened feeling dies

and once more I begin to cry.

It's then that I realize where he is,

and remember all the sadness that is

a fading hope that I will speak with you once more

and then i slowly fade into the floor.

Now the machine are keeping me stable

my heart is crumbling and not able.

So now I lie in this hospital bed

feeling completely saddened and dead. 

I've laid here for weeks and can't get up

my temperature just keeps going up and up.

I've tried to go home twice now,

but I keep hitting the floors coral.

All is black and I hear your voice

then I wake to this rubbish noise.

Nothing lovely in conversation

just a bloody machine. Damnation!

I only want to say good-bye.

But you seem happy to just see me cry.

I only want one final word.

I can't leave, it's all too blurred.

So come unto this hospital bed

and speak your whispers upon my head.

Within this ice bathe I wait

and only you can take away the heat.

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

What a moving, powerful write... There is at first that sense of joy... of a certain pleasure that fades as the room comes into view... the pain surrounding you... The words are perfect glimpses into the mind of one trapped... just wanting release. Excellent poetry...

[.nicole.]

LOVED the last stanza!

[Lost, n'MT]

This is such an amazing write and one of the most powerful and unique writes I have come across thus far. The flow and rhyme scheme is brilliant. This piece the reader glued to each line and I can the feel the emotions behind it. Such a wonderful piece to read, I thank you very much for sharing. --Broken Soul

[Zane Mathias]

very good write!!!! sad write but very Good! i love the flow and the your reference to the machine that keeps to stable (damnation) Great write B.P.

[QuietPoet]

This was very deep. It makes me think about what happened.. Hope your ok. Nice write tho, it was sad and fill with emotion.

[Kelley]

hummmmm I wonder what that was about? I loved your wording in
this poem and it made me think how sad it is when love and passion
fade.
As always Brandee great write!!!
Kelley

[Ladysue]

Very moving indeed. Very sad, but wonderfully done...

[Coyote Poetry]

You led me into a different direction from the lead lines. I could feel the hurt and desire in the words. Your description of machines and hospital beds brought the story to a sad point. Then the wish for a good bye and the last lines were powerful. You can write a story. A excellent poem.