The Love Dare

humble thoughts to a feeling of my hope

How lovely it is to think of my heart.

I only thought that it was falling apart.

He treated me badly; no thought for my feelings.

I sit and consider; are these his true dealings?

I want more to become of this love.

I thought we were for forever; a dove?

Things are all messed up; no feelings are shown.

At times it feel so absurd to say I am all alone.

God's with me I know; I pray every night.

But when will he understand my heart's fight?

He took my hand by the swing by the Lake.

And there my heart stands, unwilling to break.

I see what we've become; a broken record I'm sure.

But then life's thrown at us; What is more sore?

I know that the love is never truly gone.

But what am I to do when left by this pond?

God helps me through and answers my calls.

But who is to say that I will not simply fall.

I remember those times; tender words you'd said.

But under all that sugar... "all you wanted was lust in bed?"

I thought you were different; but our love grew apart.

What am I to do here? How can I be smart?

I love you forever. My Heart hasn't changed.

It is only with you that I show true disdain.

I know that of all people I can trust you the most.

But do you really know I am your most willing host?

Everything you do - I know that you care.

You try to show it in the ways that you share.

Now all I do is wait for some hope,

that things will get better? I cope...

I imagine a world with no worries or stress,

but all I have found is a land of non-success.

Yet I still put faith in him,

I know that one day we will win.

For better or worse the good book says.

that love is forever; or so it says.

Many don't have faith to believe.

But once you do; you'll be so free.

No cares in the world besides the one at hand.

Only love, God and passion with you're loving strand.

Author's Note

How more Fireproof can one get?

Reviews

[Colin Stewart]

it is indeed a honor to have you as a friend - your words dance in my mind - and i would like to see you come over and do some writing at:
thepoeticminds.com (poetry, literature and dreams...
where I WILL PLAY MY IRISH HARP FOR YOU!

[Edgar A Stonehill]

There is a lot going on in this piece, and my suggestion would be to split it up as much as you can. Try to get 4 or 5 out of this one. For instance, a good one could be stanzas 6, 11 and 8.

Also the references drift back and forth between "He" and "You". It may be intentional, but I got confused and couldn't tell.

Please don't take this review too seriously. Thanks for posting!

[Coyote Poetry]

So beautiful. The story of heart ache and you took us with you to the discovering the real peace we can feel in life. Love, God and passion.
Coyote

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[After note to this review 1 day later: It never amazes me how the reader interprets with such initial confidence and intuition about a piece and can be so far off from the truth (of the writer). It is an interesting dance.]

dig deeper for honesty Brandee.. was there really a "swing by the lake" .. step on the broken record .. "Many don't have faith to believe. But once you do; you'll be so free." .. will you really be so free?

nothing finds us for freedom except our own efforts to break hammers with panes of bullet proof glass to exert out stance with expert footing of where we stand for self .. explode past the fireproofing and let this poem let Them know who you are .. so close