The Devouring Sea

Think Greek Myth!

Oh sea! Which is a home to me

let my soul be set free.

For Elysian Fields I await,

If the the sea - for me - you take.

The God who's realm I travel in

does not make light - or mercy bend.

The water, it sway's, to and fro 

this compassion, I shall never know. 

Though son am I,

from Amphitrite I came

unaware of love

“Gods, do I blame?”

Immortals life are unlike the rest

chained to others, compassion - un’blest.

Now this eve has finally come

Am I really Poseidon's son?

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. You have a good concept and you've expanded on it fairly well, but there are a few grammar errors here and there, and the Shakespearean language you use doesn't seem quite as grounded as it should be to give it merit - I'd take it out and focus on just the writing. Just because you're going for a Greek myth doesn't mean you have to use that kind of language.