Death to take my life away.

This is a story, poem , not sure what those are called. about Death meeting a man and trying to take his miserable life from him. I

  I come home to the same lonely nights, lye down with no one bye my side.
 Toss and turn wondering where I went wrong, Reach for her picture and ask why your gone. The same thing, every day. Why I go through this I don't know. Why I'm put through this, life is so slow. I take my pills and drink my life so I can sleep through these nights. I wish for a death, I scream kill me take this life this theft. I see her, a beautiful face, How could this occur, This doesn't feel the same. I fade away and sleep till the next miserable day.
         "Wake up, Now wake up miserable man", I'm touched bye a very cold hand. "This is death, I'm here for an offer", I rub my eyes this couldn't be. There she is so deathly. She has beautiful eyes, A pretty face, She seems to be filled with lies, and mistakes. "What is it you want I ask, Why are you here now?", "I'm here to ask to take your life. You wished it any how.".


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Reviews

I'd be interested to see more. Nice job, so far.

[Eileen]

The words came out eloquently but it seemed a little forced and cliche.

[Amelia]

Its a really good piece and flowed nicely.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This would be a really nice story. I want to read more. It's coming out interesting. Thanks for sharing. :3