Do You Want This To Be?

all about memories, the good the bad the ugly.

Nothing like your first kiss

 

Was it in the ocean or beside that cliff?

 

I just remember our filthy waiting hands

 

And never having that moment

 

Because my heart was in your pants

 

Like all it was stolen

 

And it never eneded up in your chest

 

Especially in your short type of wearing dress

 

It was no different then kissing air

 

Or a heart attack of I didnt care

 

 

You can renew your mind with paint

 

But I left you thinking,

 

and I left you waiting.

 

But decide before you leave

 

If this time was JUST a memory

 

Author's Note

one of my favorites

Reviews

[Aekmy]

Kind of rough. Not too bad. (:

[Liza]

insightful - smart and funny - we can penetrate all the tangible walls and never get to the heart - as we go thru the motions without sharing emotions...

[S Sanders]

I love some of the wording here. Lines 3-7 are tight. Because my heart was in your pants...and it never ended up in your chest... That's classic. Those have now become two of my favorite lines to quote, that is, if you don't mind:-) Keep writing, and never look back.

[OT]

very nice!! a walk through a whole load of different emotions and memories!! well written piece!! nice!

[Julie Beth]

i like this great job :)