Our story.

well...

Its our story...

 

She saw you first.

 

She's a cutie, but a little too sad.

 

Even in the beauty she has.

 

So hey there...stop your crying.

 

Come on for me. At least keep trying.

 

I'll clean those tears from that beautifal face.

 

Let's run for this happiness and continue the chase.

 

She has had a 100 heartbreaks.

 

The love I give are you willing to take?

 

So heads beat and chances are dead.

 

Try to think of everything said.

 

With tears in the rain and silence dancing below the clouds.

 

It was perfect for our love to be found.

 

Smiles I make to hide frowns you don't show.

 

What you have inside is best to be known.

 

The love that is left.

 

It was for the best.

Author's Note

little longer then most but i like it.

Reviews

[Black Cat Fever]

Very melancholy but the words and feelings are beautiful in their pain and sadness.
I really do like this one a lot.

[Phibby Venable]

i love the compassion that comes out in the poem & the
way the struggle is shown so strongly.

[NoAirToBreatheXSuffocat..]

Awsome. Beautiful. Amazing write.

[Liza]

love out of sadness or sadness out of love...left me thinking.

[Brad Baum]

"Smiles I made to hide frowns you don't show." That definitely touches something with me. So very true. To need to put on a show for someone else, I can relate all too well. Enjoyed this! Very nice write.

[Honestly, Abe]

"Smiles I make to hide frowns you don't show"

What a brilliant depiction of a struggling relationship, and you really captured it. Your poetry tells a story that runs much deeper than the words that lie on the surface, and I both respect and appreciate that. What an intriguing piece of work, I'm definitely going to check into more of your poetry.

[Caitlynxoxo]

"The love that is left.
It was for the best."

Great way to end a beautiful poem :) It has a dreamy sort of feel to it, like reading a fairtale. The speaker sounds honest, willing to risk everything just to make this broken-hearted girl feel loved again. Very sweet. Thanks for sharing!

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[Nothing Personal]

I agree with Holly. It is difficult to win the trust of a girl who has been brokenhearted a number of times..but still the best solution lies in finding a true love..breaking through the emotional defense and winning her over and giving her the love she deserves..Good write Adam..

[Holly O'Brien]

a sweet poem♥... I love how the speaker is willing to show the brokenhearted girl a better love. I admire the way he trusts himself to love decently :))....lovely poem~

[kaylynnmelody♥]

Aw i really like this.