Broken Intentions

I lost to much to feel my legs i cant go on its to late pick up my pieces put me back together im broken now and forever all the kings horses all the kings men make me feel like a little kid again i cant be helped let me be ill die right here at your knees no pain is forever no love is true for me it was more then anything i could do i put all i had in to my life with you but now that its over i cant move i cant reach for a gun i cant reach for some rope all i can do is sit here tell i choke i wont be long dont be mad just give me one minute in the life we had no matter what ill be near to your heart remember to buy me a plot and never give up your art its to late for me my sins cant be forgivine just frget me love and everything will be amended

Reviews

[Robert Winthrup]

Thank you guys for the nice words good to know there are people out there who care.

[Jen Marks]

Awesome poem...honestly! :)
Very well written. Deep too.

But here's a suggestion, post it like this:

I lost too much to feel my legs
I can't go on, it's too late
Pick up my pieces, put me back together
I'm broken now and forever

All the kings horses all the kings men
Make me feel like a little kid again
I can't be helped, let me be
I'll die right here at your knees

No pain is forever, no love is true
For me it was more then anything I could do
I put all I had into my life with you
But now that its over, I cant move

I cant reach for a gun, I can't reach for some rope
All I can do is sit here 'til I choke
I won't be long, don't be mad
Just give me one minute in the life we had

No matter what, I'll be near to your heart
Remember to buy me a plot and never give up your art
It's to late for me, my sins can't be forgiven
Just forget me love, and everything will be amended

:)

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♥Jen Marks

[Alicia™]

That was absolutely amazing, but you could work on spelling and punctuation. Great job!!