Apotheosis

I think boys and angels are the easiest topics to write about, to be honest.

Apotheosis 

And in the grasp of 
the moon’s tight fist
I thought you looked like an angel,
like Gabriel--
        an Archangel. 

I thought that should the
sun come up in a few hours
that you would perhaps fade away 
into nihility--
        into stardust. 

I thought you were the 
most beautiful thing I’d ever seen
and I thought that you weren’t even real;
completely artificial--
        a mannequin. 
        
You looked so childish in your
sleep and oh how I longed to 
push aside those stray 
golden locks--
        your halo.

But like a Seraph--
        you burn.

Author's Note

I like constructive criticism.

Reviews

[Horizons]

Here comes the reality from your soul
I think boys and angels are the easiest topics to write about, to be honest. yeh, i do agree, i believe in the statement. It's a realistic statement which's a cause of a writer's here. Now come to your writing, yeh, i didn't find any criticism and if i get in any stuff written by you i'll surely love to let you know :)
It's a nice piece of writing, i loved your title you picked up to write.

[J. Kell]

Wow I thought this was very good. I like all the metaphors that you employed throughout this piece, the ending really nailed it for me "But like a Seraph--
you burn." This line is excellent!