Walking

Well.. -sigh-

Shes walking
Don't look down
Shes walking
Try not to frown

She's walking

One step after another
Full of caution and doubt
One after another
Filled with terror and fright

walking 

It's hard to balance 
On this forever lasting path  
This tightrope here
Unbalanced, that's life

walking

Being so high up 
the fall painful 
So very frightening

walking

"Do I catch myself
How do I stop myself"
Things she thought 
Outloud

She keeps walking 

Next time she falls
That'll be it
She won't get up anymore

"I won't let you fall my dear"
truth? or are they more lies?
Can't you see, this time it isn't me
Dear your driving me to the end...

"if you fall, I'll fall with you. I'll take the pain and keep you safe in my arms. I'll make sure you get back up again. I'll help any way I can"
Kind friend why
Why care so much?
When we both know how hard
 that task would be

Thoughts fill her mind
Walking

The next time she falls,
Shell fall on the blood stained
 shards of glass
Left behind
From hard times 
that have passed

When she finally falls
She won't get up.
Won't wake up. 
Never see the light of day again

Walking
Concentration faltering
Walking 
Oh look...
Shes Already Falling
 

Author's Note

well there you go :/ -sigh-

Reviews

[Echo Nightfield]

I love this piece, it's very easy for a reader to connect. It also ranged in the anxiety that anyone can have in time of difficulty in their life, not to mention that ONE friend who always helps you see better and be better even though they can't see it in themselves.

Very well pieced together, someone already went through and told you where to put some things that could improve it so I'm not going to repeat what they have already said.

Great jobs girls. Kudos

[Shy Girl]

I'm a trifle confused...with your note of "sigh"..is this a good thing that she falls or a bad thing...because it reads to me both ways...I read it twice...in there somewhere is the seed that it's a good thing that she falls...like the shards of glass are just the ticket to make her pick herself up again..kick in the butt type punch..but then she looses sight of the smile and begins to faulter again, as you wrote...so ... but it was a very thought provoking read for me...and I enjoyed reading it...thank you for the RR :)

[Dayran]

The pessimist may finally be right but the optimist has a better journey - an English saying. Nice write!

[Lily Mae]

A journey in trust and I loved the way you used walking to give it movement forward in strength..xo

[eglantine]

the repetition of the word "walking", especially when it stand on its own in its own stanza, adds the ryhthmic illusion of walking through the poem. I liked that a lot. Just double-check your grammer though, missing some apostrophes.

[?]

Emotive piece...I agree with Chris...it takes trust...
Well expressed

[Kiari Sabon]

even if the other is not there someone else may take their place and help u as you fall or pull u up when down help doesnt always come from where we are looking... its a very nice write

[Chris]

Sometimes that other will actually be there... takes trust... and trust is never given - just earned.