Walking

Well.. -sigh-

Shes walking
Don't look down
Shes walking
Try not to frown

She's walking

One step after another
Full of caution and doubt
One after another
Filled with terror and fright

walking 

It's hard to balance 
On this forever lasting path  
This tightrope here
Unbalanced, that's life

walking

Being so high up 
the fall painful 
So very frightening

walking

"Do I catch myself
How do I stop myself"
Things she thought 
Outloud

She keeps walking 

Next time she falls
That'll be it
She won't get up anymore

"I won't let you fall my dear"
truth? or are they more lies?
Can't you see, this time it isn't me
Dear your driving me to the end...

"if you fall, I'll fall with you. I'll take the pain and keep you safe in my arms. I'll make sure you get back up again. I'll help any way I can"
Kind friend why
Why care so much?
When we both know how hard
 that task would be

Thoughts fill her mind
Walking

The next time she falls,
Shell fall on the blood stained
 shards of glass
Left behind
From hard times 
that have passed

When she finally falls
She won't get up.
Won't wake up. 
Never see the light of day again

Walking
Concentration faltering
Walking 
Oh look...
Shes Already Falling
 

Author's Note

well there you go :/ -sigh-

Reviews

[Echo Nightfield]

I love this piece, it's very easy for a reader to connect. It also ranged in the anxiety that anyone can have in time of difficulty in their life, not to mention that ONE friend who always helps you see better and be better even though they can't see it in themselves.

Very well pieced together, someone already went through and told you where to put some things that could improve it so I'm not going to repeat what they have already said.

Great jobs girls. Kudos

[Tess]

i'm speechless

[Shadow Spirit]

It sounds almost like me, I stumble and fall sometimes. But getting back up is the best thing to do even if it feels too hard to. If someone laughs, or you're ever afraid of falling and getting hurt again, don't be. Everyone falls and some people are also frightened of it. There's no reason to be afraid though, someone will always reach out a hand along the way. And the pain is worth living with, because it's not as bad as people make it out to be.

[Kathryn]

Those last three words sent a sad little shiver down my spine. Excellent write, I really loved it. Beautiful symbolism. Great job :)

[asdarkeyesclose]

and we all fall, until all we feel is the falling. fantastic.

[Roze Collions]

i love the work but sometimes we need to be the one there 4 ourselfs life will be ruff but there wont always be someone there

[Robert Robbie Lord Dudl..]

never fall on your a*s
and never fall on your glass
raise them both like Hell
well there you go
now a shadow
still in control, if, not so,
get hold a plastic glass
good poem
good advise
so wise indeed
to take heed of
careless ways
by a time of s**t
and giggles
of that, i am happy to say
of that, it can be benign
to the body
and mind
have a good time
happy for each
love, song, dance

[25syd25]

wow

[light and ashes]

In my opinion, this is the best of what I have read of you so far. Going through the motions of everyday prentending that everything is ok is something that I very much relate to because, I spent the majority of my life doing it so this poem really touched me. Yes I have spent most of my life in mourning of lost pieces of me. Sad and a little pathetic I know. I love every stanza but the first two stood out to me the most.
"Shes walking
Don't look down
Shes walking
Try not to frown"

"She's walking
One step after another
Full of caution and doubt
One after another
Filled with terror and fright"

Outstanding!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Great tempo, suspense to this write...
liked it so much :D