Song

Consumed in darkness

waiting in silence

Listening to those dear words

Your lies

 

Feeling my heart beat

Swallow all my fear

Allow me not to faulter

 

Why sing aloud

When nothing will be found

In my choked up teared words

I may sing not so clear

 

Overcoming sleepless nights

Gotta get some rest tonight

Confusing thoughts in mind

Will it last

 

Fading laughter

Fading time

Waiting for someone

To sing along

 

Waisting time

Don't know why

And maybe I dont understand

Why wait for someone to change my mind

Reviews

[WritersSoul]

Now, this is my kinda poem :) I love the sound of how some darkness is flowing through these lines.
Really beautiful words i enjoyed it :)

[Dayran]

Maybe it wasn't a lie, only you thought it was. You could be waiting for someone to show you it was true.

[MS. BABy]

i love this piece, although it is a little dark it still shows power in the last verse...awesome..

[Ace D Portgas]

In the second to last paragraph I think you either meant to put Fading or Finding but I think either one fits

Very good. Loved the rhyme scheme and flow of it overall

Keep it up!

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

This sounds like a song to me. Very good poem :-)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

I love this thought provoking poem, marvellous :)

[Misty Blue Eyes]

Whoa....very nicely said.. wonderful poem