Song

Consumed in darkness

waiting in silence

Listening to those dear words

Your lies

 

Feeling my heart beat

Swallow all my fear

Allow me not to faulter

 

Why sing aloud

When nothing will be found

In my choked up teared words

I may sing not so clear

 

Overcoming sleepless nights

Gotta get some rest tonight

Confusing thoughts in mind

Will it last

 

Fading laughter

Fading time

Waiting for someone

To sing along

 

Waisting time

Don't know why

And maybe I dont understand

Why wait for someone to change my mind

Reviews

[Amber Miller]

Very good flow.Nice job with it.

[rae52]

i like it

[EMF]

Gppd poem, only a couple of typos, but a bit of editing never goes amiss. Nice flow and form.

[Joshua]

very good poetry. There were a couple typos in the poem, but other than that I see nothing wrong with that. Your work is inspiring.

[Larry Dyson]

control...of ones fears."wasting...not waisting"?

[Carrion.]

filled with emotion, I absoulutely loved it.:#

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Amazing poem!
And packed with emotion also!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Practically perfect.

[Thea]

Amazing poem...Well expressed... :)))

[Pebbles]

wel done , well written so we can feel what your trying to convey ...i hate waiting it pains me to the core x