Song

Consumed in darkness

waiting in silence

Listening to those dear words

Your lies

 

Feeling my heart beat

Swallow all my fear

Allow me not to faulter

 

Why sing aloud

When nothing will be found

In my choked up teared words

I may sing not so clear

 

Overcoming sleepless nights

Gotta get some rest tonight

Confusing thoughts in mind

Will it last

 

Fading laughter

Fading time

Waiting for someone

To sing along

 

Waisting time

Don't know why

And maybe I dont understand

Why wait for someone to change my mind

Reviews

[Midori]

Vary nice, you used the best words for this poem and I can tell you put your heart into this.

[Audrey Howitt]

I agree, this feels very personal to me. Lovely use of emotional expression here and nice ending!

[James Bonner]

Usually the sight of another depressing poem frustrates me. Relationships and Sadness are two of the most over-portrayed ideas amongst poets--and I find that neither have been developed to their potential. It's all the same. "Song," however, managed to create something...different. I appreciate that you used "Why wait for someone to change my mind" as your last line..

[Jeremy Baker]

Great expression of emotions and questioning.

[Desmund Tiny]

I adore this very much..... very well written ....... nice poem

^^,

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Emotions and high stacked fear are all preset in this piece, well done, great read.

[rwar ish me]

I really liked this. good job, nice write
~Amai

[Lily Mae]

You really did a great job in expressing your emotions here..xx

[Tom Benson]

This came across as very personal, emotional with a sense of reality. Good work!

[Kathryn]

I love it! Lovely flow, and it's really touching :) Great job, well done :)