Song

Consumed in darkness

waiting in silence

Listening to those dear words

Your lies

 

Feeling my heart beat

Swallow all my fear

Allow me not to faulter

 

Why sing aloud

When nothing will be found

In my choked up teared words

I may sing not so clear

 

Overcoming sleepless nights

Gotta get some rest tonight

Confusing thoughts in mind

Will it last

 

Fading laughter

Fading time

Waiting for someone

To sing along

 

Waisting time

Don't know why

And maybe I dont understand

Why wait for someone to change my mind

Reviews

[AshleeKayann]

This is beautifully written. It's to-the-point, but if one looks below the surface, there is a layer of depth to it as well. The emotion you were wishing to convey is clear. (:

[Ramblings of a Mediocre..]

In my choked up teared words
I may sing not so clear

- this line just really got to me.

So full of emotion. I love it. :)

[luke312]

Nice Flow. I like that it is very relatable

[Kid Kirby]

Very powerful. As someone fighting with "sleeples nights" and "confusing thoughts" your words really hit home.

[Daytonight]

So poignant. Well done.

[Grace Catherine C.]

This was really good, I liked it alot. It's powerful and has a beautiful flow.

[Calypso]

This reminds me of singing a solo. I've never sung a solo before so I assuming.

[DontBlink158]

Great poem, i really like the last two stanzas.

[StarNinja]

*wasting time

[tk]

fading laughter fading time. that's just too sad.. NICE POEM! :)