Song

Consumed in darkness

waiting in silence

Listening to those dear words

Your lies

 

Feeling my heart beat

Swallow all my fear

Allow me not to faulter

 

Why sing aloud

When nothing will be found

In my choked up teared words

I may sing not so clear

 

Overcoming sleepless nights

Gotta get some rest tonight

Confusing thoughts in mind

Will it last

 

Fading laughter

Fading time

Waiting for someone

To sing along

 

Waisting time

Don't know why

And maybe I dont understand

Why wait for someone to change my mind

Reviews

[Irvette Dauphine]

really nice!
i really like this..
great job :D

[frozensakura]

Thanks !!

[Weeping Willow]

cool, why is everyone better then me it not farrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!

[Peaceworker22]

You just have to practice and "feel" the poetry. I just focus my emotions and somehow the emotions become words, and it's all downhill from there. Perhaps learning new words to express yourself will help you too. : ) Just keep at it and never give up!

[Peaceworker22]

I just focus *on (Oops)

[frozensakura]

juss keep writing. the more you write the easier it will get and you will get better.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Nice! I love how this piece was written. It flowed so well and i love the emotions! =D great write!

[Archia]

Sorry, I accidentally pressed submit before I had finished. I like the repeating idea of the song and singing. This was a really nice poem.

[Archia]

I enjoyed the emotions that came across in this.

[Spookers]

I like the emotions in this. Good job

[paparapapa]

Really sad. I loved the lines
"Fading laughter
Fading time
Waiting for someone
To sing along"

They mirror the tone of this poem really well. Good job o this one.

[Sashalee]

i really like it :)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Very nice, I like this a lot, you fit so much into this and yet it is so nice and it fits.

[Dezzyray]

really great work! i don't know how to explain how amazing it was! :D