still doll

the doors open and the light turn on
in come people from near and far
we watch as they look as us in admiring daze
while all we can do is wait

 

one comes up to me and smiles
while another takes away those precious from me
my anger and sadness cannot be shown
for it is unacceptable

 

we never chose to be here
we do not wish to stay
but either way, we have no choice
we play this part in fate

 

i watch as they are taken away
one by one
a silent goodbye is all i can say

for i am but another still doll

Author's Note

just cant stand seeing those dolls... they remind me to much of me...

Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

This is a cool and original write.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this was a great write. I loved the rhythm within the piece as well. I love the write in general. Going to add it to my favorites. Keep up the good writing.

[boston house kitten]

i really enjoy the rythm in this piece. its not overly affected and it has a nice natural movement, like a sun dress on a windy day.

nice sentiment - very deep - prescient even.

[Roze Collions]

i like it

[Yina]

Aw poor dolls! I never thought of this before! Very interesting indeed

[WynterPhoenix]

This is written from an unexpected POV. I like it. It's a very clever write.

[..]

...some dolls are just so creepy and so are some clowns. I am horrified of clowns. Nice write, it's deep & dark.

[kasanova]

creative point of view :D

[samurai212]

Nice job hun :D