still doll

the doors open and the light turn on
in come people from near and far
we watch as they look as us in admiring daze
while all we can do is wait

 

one comes up to me and smiles
while another takes away those precious from me
my anger and sadness cannot be shown
for it is unacceptable

 

we never chose to be here
we do not wish to stay
but either way, we have no choice
we play this part in fate

 

i watch as they are taken away
one by one
a silent goodbye is all i can say

for i am but another still doll

Author's Note

just cant stand seeing those dolls... they remind me to much of me...

Reviews

[DontBlink158]

This poem had many layers and it was great. I loved it. I think everyone feels like a still doll sometimes. Well at least i do. I was really great. Keep it up!

[SilentVerses]

What layers of meaning these words lovingly hold, a story can be told through the emotion you felt whilst writing this. Emotions run awry throughout the stanzas but it is great, there is a taste of sadness and desperation that gives this poem a bitter taste, that is pleasing because of the contrast it makes to the eloquent style, so ornate and delicate, like the porcelain dolls. Beautiful.

[Daytonight]

I love how you told this from the dolls point of view! Well done. Great write! Keep on penning.

[Samantha Heaton]

i love the ryhme schem of this poem good job!

[Florence]

I love the rhythm and imagery in this poem. It reminds me of life, how we can all be considered the still dolls like in your poem, and as life progresses, our friends and family are taken away from us one by one. Amazing work. :)

[brenda]

sad but great imagery here i love it !:)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Creativity at its best:)

Yas

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

this is interesting, how you created the sight of the dolls. really nice.

[silentpoet]

very original.

[Sukriti Suki]

hmm....Interesting.. I have noticed how the works I have read so far deal with doors..Enjoying your work.